First draft

  Today a lot of people use internet. The internet became much familiar, so the internet users are on the increase. People through the internet communicate with social world and friends, search information which you want to know, argue your opinion on the government homepage, more over you can listen music which is recorded yesterday. We never imagine before. The internet makes the world become more faster and  more closer. But didn't you ever think about the defect of internet? The SNS is the key point of internet communication. Especially for young people, the SNS is the best method to communicate with friends. We can updating our recent life on Facebook let our friends know, also can write criticism about government then posting on our own blog to show our interest in politics. These SNS seem to make people more interactive. But actually, SNS makes people lonely. 

  People know that through SNS we can communicate with others who live far apart from us .Today, the user of SNS are more than before. Currently, the SNS addicts are increased. People who feel lonely are more tend to be addicted to SNS.

  Many people may wonder why the SNS makes people feel loneliness. Because the SNS's goal is to make the world more interactive and communicational.  But it is true that SNS makes people lonely. I have found some evidences to prove my topic.

  First, SNS makes us compare with other person. When we login SNS, we could see our friends' current life. For example, I want to buy the latest new laptop, but my mother say no. At that time if I found my friends bought new laptop which I want to buy, then I will feel envious. and then I may blame my mother she don't allow me to buy laptop. Also, let's imagine when we feel lonely and want to make boy/girl friend, but no candidates. At that time you saw your friend became couple. It may make your loneliness become deeper than before.http://gadgets.ndtv.com/social-networking/news/facebook-can-make-you-feel-envious-lonely-and-miserable-study-321157

  Second, SNS is a failed "communication". "Communication" means understand each other through speech and gesture. but most SNS can not convey the perfect sense which implicated in text. When we communicate with others in face to face, we can show our expression and voice tone to give sense what I want to say and what I feel. But SNS just show text and a little emoticon. It is absurdly scant amount to convey perfect sense. So it is not communication.
http://www.cyberpsychology.eu/view.php?cisloclanku=2008111802

  Third, False Information on SNS makes people feel loneliness. "human  trafficking is serious in xx city!" "Prostitution of children happen in xx school.." "The earth will collapse in 2012." These information make people feel disappointment to the society, and even make people to hate this world. http://www.socialsciencespace.com/2014/04/how-does-false-information-spread-online/
  One study say that Campus-SNS web site addicts tend to be female, young and have used the campus-SNS web sites for relatively a long time and frequently visit the homepages of others. More importantly, loneliness was found to be a significant predictor for the campus-SNS website addiction.

  I argued that SNS actually makes people feel lonely, and I have some evidence. Although I had prove my topic through logical confirmation, still some people will disagree with my topic. 

  Opponents may say we can make new friends through SNS to deal with loneliness and boredom. But I can sure that the SNS friend is not a real friend. Friend is not a tool to deal with loneliness or a number to show to other person. also internet friends just can meet in the internet. when we had a talk with SNS friends and turned off the computer, came back to the real world, we will feel loneliness which more deeper than before. We live in real world is not a social network world. Further more, if one person who do not have any friends, and this person want to find some new friends through SNS, but when he form new ID of Facebook, and looked at the mark "FRIEND_0", it will make the loneliness deeper than before.

 http://www.theguardian.com/media/2010/aug/07/social-networking-friends-lonely
 


   Also opponents may say We can communicate with friends everywhere and every time through SNS, so we would not feel lonely. but the SNS is a failed communication. "Communication"  means understand  each other through speech and gesture. but most SNS can not convey the perfect sense which implicated in text. When we communicate with others in face to face, we can show our expression and voice tone to give sense what I want to say and what I feel.  But SNS just show text and a little emoticon. It is absurdly scant amount to convey perfect sense. "The quality of online communication is impoverished in comparison with the physical, real world face-to-face communication," says Dr Catriona Morrison, an experimental psychologist at the University of Leeds in England who has studied the link between depression and internet addiction.  "You often don't hear someone's voice and you don't see any body signals, which we know from traditional psychology are important." Like this, when we communicate with others, we have to use our voice(tone, speed, accent) and body(gesture, face expression) together. So SNS is the failed communication.

So it is not communication. Also  the SNS makes us compare with other person, then we will feel lonely. 

  Additionally, the opponents may say many people use SNS to spend boring time. But as one study proved that campus-SNS website addicts tend to be lonely.   Proponents of social networking sites say that the online communities promote increased interaction with friends and family; offer teachers, librarians, and students valuable access to educational support and materials; facilitate social and political change; and disseminate useful information rapidly.

  Opponents of social networking say that the sites prevent face-to-face communication; waste time on frivolous activity; alter children’s brains and behavior making them more prone to ADHD; expose users to predators like pedophiles and burglars; and spread false and potentially dangerous information. 
http://socialnetworking.procon.org/#Background

  47% of American adults used social networking sites like Facebook, My Space, Twitter, LinkedIn, and Classmates.com in 2011, up from 26% in 2008. As the user of social network service increased, the people who feel lonely are also increased. The SNS do promote interaction with friends and family, but at the same time it promote comparison among friends, too. Also it can not named "communication" . because it is failed communication. although we can disseminate useful information rapidly, but on the SNS  also have a lot of false information which confuse people. Many people connect SNS when they feel boredom or lonely. But it is not a good idea to solve loneliness. We have to know that the SNS makes people more lonely. I hope people after read my argument, those lonely person will find something else to treat loneliness, rather than addicted in SNS. 
http://www.pewinternet.org/fact-sheets/social-networking-fact-sheet/